Laptop VS desktop (outline)
Thesis statement: laptop and desktop, although both are computers indeed with same functions and composition, have many characteristics that don’t share with each other.
1st topic sentence: There is a clear difference between the size of laptop and that of desktop.
Supporting details: All the stuffs inside laptop are deliberately made to be smaller than those inside the desktop, e.g. internet card and audio card. Also, the desktop will leave a lot more space inside the “box” to enable the convection of the air so that it is not too hot in the “box”.
2nd topic sentence: Because of the sizes and many other different characteristics, laptop and desktop satisfy different requirement from people.
Supporting details: laptop is used more by people like businessman who wants to move the computer from place to place to do presentation or receiving email, since most laptop can connect to wi-fi and they are small enough to be put into a suitcase. Desktop satisfies the customer who is able to sit at one place and research on something or maybe just staying at home.
3rd topic sentence: due to different reasons, laptop is always more expensive than desktop, too.
Supporting details: as we know, laptop is more compact than desktop so that it is more difficult for people to produce. On the contrary, nearly everything in a desktop can be bought (at least in china) in a very low price, which is another reason for the low price of desktop.
James, I like your C&C outline, but let's refine the wordy topic sentences with concise words. Based on your ideas, I think you can focus on the three following things: a size (or appearance), a purpose, and price. They would be your subtopics, right? You can account for both similarities and differences (or either one of them) by comparing and contrasting laptops and desktops. If you have any difficulties, stop by my office. I would be happy to work with you. Go ahead, and work on your paper!
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